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The boy called “spineless” has a backbone
lost in the rubble of Hiroshima, his unfettered hands
pulling at maps and photographs.
With worn and radioactive identity, he knows
that the world is a veteran, sick of empathy
and can look massacre in the eye without blinking.
Hastily, people will cleanse themselves
of alpha particles and corpses
they did not touch.
History classrooms will suck the marrow of tragedy
unafflicted, passing Nagasaki
as another word in a textbook,
pointing at pictures, saying
That’s what you get
when you mess with America.

He does not blame them.
They have not seen for themselves
the crimson cloud inhaling his old home,
the city-turned-carcass,
the cave of his mother’s mouth
swallowing the stolen decades.
They did not touch the ashes imprinted
on buildings, the black silhouettes of people
whose bodies burned into them;
did not put his father’s jacket
into the back closet
one last time.
Still, this rubble-spined boy
keeps firm the cast the world removed.
Across seventy years
and eight thousand miles,
(five inches on his map)
morning breaks
like a soldier's last wineglass:
a city wakes,
a sun still rises, time hauls forward
and bodies do not detonate
anymore.
This nuclear child
of war’s relentless womb:
he croons and mumbles on reverence,
seeming all too unfelt.
To an ungrieving populace
he writes the postscript of war
on the back of his father’s portrait:
“Does nobody think that maybe, when a tree falls in the forest,
we’re all around to hear it
but we just don’t listen?”

sometimes i think i know people i've never met.

for theWrittenRevolution: is the flow of the poem effective for its message? does the last sentence fit the rest of the poem well and make sense? 

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Given 2014-02-08
1945 in sepia by BittersweetObsession ( Suggested by doughboycafe and Featured by neurotype )
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Tangled-Tales Featured By Owner Feb 10, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That last line is brilliance. Fantastic work and wording all around! :)
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Morning-Star-42 Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
“Does nobody think that maybe, when a tree falls in the forest,
we’re all around to hear it but we just don’t listen?”

Relevant for everyone, always.
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CPT-CUPCAKE-art Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   Traditional Artist
This is a beautifully written piece that really makes me think twice about Hiroshima
My favorite line: “Does nobody think that maybe, when a tree falls in the forest,
we’re all around to hear it but we just don’t listen?” 
Keep writing :)
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TruthisTruth Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Congratulations on the Daily Deviation! :clap:
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Karinta Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Student General Artist
Mmmmmm I love the concept - and the flow is very, very lovely. And YES the last lines fit so very well!
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Zazzine Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Yes, last sentence makes sense.
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BittersweetObsession Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   General Artist
I'm glad, thank you. :)
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5NinjaCat Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2014
A very well-deserved DD! This will be going into my favorites.
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BittersweetObsession Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014   General Artist
Thank you!
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5NinjaCat Featured By Owner Feb 9, 2014
You're welcome!
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